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121. 15 May 2010 07:09 | ||
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giraffe - haven't checked word count, but I don't care; the first five paragraphs had me spellbound. Still have. |
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122. 15 May 2010 07:28 | ||
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Ok giraffe let me be succint about your latest non-competitional story "Astral". I loved it. What a ride. It was much more than a plain trip through space, rather an involved look at dreams and the way our minds work. I think you even through in there some of the feelings going around ThinkWrite at the present. Good Job! I want to see more. Good use of quixmickle to boot! |
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123. 15 May 2010 07:31 | ||
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Q...thanks for brow beating (lol). I deserve it. Now what if Ron (the punisher) had written the same critique? |
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124. 15 May 2010 07:54 | ||
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Alrighty, finally got some time to write. Here's what I've got, I'm not sure if I'm really happy with it but the first line kinda got into my head and I had to follow it. 318 including the title. |
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125. 15 May 2010 07:55 | ||
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Oh and I think if Ron had made the same comment Morshy would have been just as upset but I'm not sure Ron would have apologized. |
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126. 15 May 2010 08:00 | ||
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Morsy...I, like Doug, found your story to be unoriginal...but I don't think that makes it bad. Nothing's truly unique anymore. It's all been done before. What made it good is the compelling way you told it. The concept is something I've read before, but I was still quite drawn in when reading your story because of the way you wrote it. The writing is always more important than the story, in my opinion. |
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127. 15 May 2010 10:05 | ||
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Thanks, Doug. I work overnight and when things get slow, I'd rather be doing this than political blogs - boring. That's why I find more time for this than most have. Sometimes I feel like I'm writing too much, but WTF. |
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128. 15 May 2010 10:38 | ||
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Doug - you operate under a different umbrella of responsibility. I know... no fair, huh. ;> |
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129. 15 May 2010 10:39 | ||
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Dragon. It's not your best work (in my mind) but it still hits you in the old solar plexus. It's sad and also uplifting. I wanted to know what tune she was humming. You are right about writing things down to get it out of your system. Not every thought is gonna be brilliant, but if you don't put them out there, the brilliant ones never come. |
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130. 16 May 2010 00:11 | ||
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Thanks Qsilv BTW. I thought of it as a toss off because the ideas came from a book called "Journeys Out of the Body" by Robert Monroe about astral projection. I'm glad you got it. |
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131. 16 May 2010 00:26 | ||
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Is this all words? In a single sentence? |
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132. 16 May 2010 00:27 | ||
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And again with the keyboard. Yawn. |
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133. 16 May 2010 00:38 | ||
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And Doug, I love you man, but a critique should be more than saying "That was shitty. Do better next time." A negative criticism needs to be backed up with some constructive criticism or at least a reason for trashing them. |
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134. 16 May 2010 00:40 | ||
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Hey, anotherron. Where's your story? |
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135. 16 May 2010 00:48 | ||
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I am purplexed by quixmickle. I managed one but no one commented. It's one-and-done with me and fake words. I got nothin. |
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136. 16 May 2010 00:50 | ||
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Does this iteration of TW ever end? Can we get another list? |
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137. 16 May 2010 01:04 | ||
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Mrsjesus was reprimanded for not following anotherronism's rules. He doesn't even participate any more. Morshy was scolded for not being unique enough. I need a definition of the Torchbearer. Is it the God of Creativity? Is it the God of anotherronism? I'm getting confused. People are leaving this forum faster that people are joining in. We're down to just a few. What's wrong with this picture? |
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138. 16 May 2010 01:10 | ||
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Ron, mrsjesus wrote a great story with his OWN list. You should feel free to do that too. |
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139. 16 May 2010 03:52 | ||
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Catching up from marius, "the ancient one," decidedly female ... (wink). Tee hee, makes me recall grandson age 9 asking what it was like to be "so old." Hahaha, it's GREAT! |
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140. 16 May 2010 04:29 | ||
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giraffe - Peace Class - Playful look at peace, greed ... want to attend that truth seminar. ; ) And, "Going Astral" - am with Qsilv 150% on this. Spellbound for sure. Probably one of my favorites of all of yours. |