giraffe

Methinks Morshy per'aps a guitar user be.

mouse

Morshy reminded me of dueling bangos in Deliverance. It was very visual. Liked it alot.

Qsilv

morshy, I've just re-read that... several times (smiles) and I do have one editorial comment.

There's a problem with the tempo... it will hold even as it is, but the aftertaste... hm... admittedly this is like assessing wine but...

For the amount and quality of prose build-up, the climax is almost invisible... lost in its brevity. (The denouement is perfect.)

But the climax needs to stand balanced on its own two feet, and a way to do that -- without changing a single word -- is just to put it in its own paragraph:
>>And then something subtle changed... <snip> ...utterly dead.<<


Word count's 788 with the (excellently chosen for anyone who's able to reference that tune) one-word title.

Thanks for sharing this one!

marius

My goodness! Thanks Nylecoj! Have been gone all day and more to do, so if new TW isn't up and going by tonight (have to think of words ya know), look for it tomorrow morning.

And, Nylecoj, thanks for your patience indeed, and thanks for another fun, and educational, TW! : )

Qsilv

morshy .....wowwwwwwwww...

marius! Congrats! You'll be a delightful leader...

Ny - thank you for your nifty new twist on the wordlist --and your patience!